Some people believe that nowadays too much money is being spent on weddings and birthdays. Why do you think it is happening? What can be done to improve the situation?

The group of folks have
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opinion that marriages and birth anniversaries
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the
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wastage
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waste
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of
money
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. The key
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problem is that
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society wants to show
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status and peer pressure. To tackle these issues, simple weddings and financial security should be encouraged. Both points will
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in the following paragraphs.
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with, the major
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why
people
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do
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is that they want to flaunt their power in
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front of the community.
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are
doing
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getting
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marriages
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married
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in large
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halls in order to show the public that they have more
money
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India,
people
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do upload
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pictures on TikTok and Instagram where they
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money
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from the head of the bride and groom without any
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.
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, peer pressure is the other
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when human beings spend
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a huge
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amount only because they see their friends doing
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and
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they tend to do the same
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not
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their reputation. Taking my
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example, he told my mother that my classmate celebrated his birthday in a 5-star hotel, and he
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did
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.
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, these reasons are causing a myriad of issues, which need to be controlled. To combat these sufferings, the government need to encourage a sober style of weddings; the crowd who do
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need to be punished with a penalty.
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, financial security should be important for
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people
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as if
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save
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, only
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can their generation survive for a long period.
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, the higher authorities of
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arranged a campaign where
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were taught about saving
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and their value.
To conclude
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,
although
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there are various reasons that the community is spending blindly on different events but the solutions are
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there, like encouragement of programs and teaching sessions to address
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task response
Plan your essay. State one main idea about the problem and one idea for the solution. Keep each idea to one paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Be clear in the plan. Use a short intro, two body paragraphs, and a short conclusion. Use simple linking words like and, but, so, also.
task response
You show care for the topic and give a view that spending on events is a problem.
coherence cohesion
There are some links between ideas with words like 'to begin with' and 'moreover'.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • wedding
  • birthday
  • money
  • spend
  • celebrate
  • show off
  • wealth
  • success
  • social media
  • influence
  • impress
  • friends
  • family
  • tradition
  • costly
  • industry
  • worthwhile
  • improve
  • situation
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