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Writing Samples
Band 1

Some people think that activities done in a person’s free time should be planned, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

In today's
world
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 everyone
occupied
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is occupied
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 by work
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, and
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 there are many activities we can do. It is argued that
,
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 planning is beneficial for everything before doing the
some
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same
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 activities.
However
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, others think life is
unpredicatable
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unpredictable
 and we are unaware next
of second
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second of
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out
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our
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life
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lives
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. I will discuss both
prespectives
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perspectives
 in
essays
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the essays
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 below.
On the other hand
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side
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apply
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, there is a group
how are
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that
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 mainly
focusing plan to
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focuses on planning
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evertyhing
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everything
 in their life, especially at
works
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work
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. Without any
planning
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planning,
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 your day can
be
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pass
meaningless
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meaninglessly
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.
For instance
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, many people before going
any
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travell
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travel
 booking at hotels or buying tickets.
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 that if we
are
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do
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 not plan
this
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 before
month
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a month
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 or
days
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days,
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 how
catastropic
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catastrophic
thinks
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things
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 can be
happen
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that happen
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language
Fix big grammar mistakes and wrong spell words so the reader can read it with ease.
structure
Say your view at once and keep it through the essay.
content
Give one clear example for each side and then explain why it matters.
content
You try to talk about both sides.
language
You use some linking words to show contrast.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plan ahead
  • planning
  • routine
  • free time
  • leisure
  • hobby
  • activity
  • time
  • use time well
  • time management
  • rest
  • relax
  • mood
  • stress
  • calm
  • energy
  • skill
  • learn
  • goal
  • benefit
  • drawback
  • balance
  • mix
  • flexible
  • freedom
  • choice
  • health
  • joy
  • fun
  • work
  • play
  • change
  • control
  • values
  • opinion
  • conclusion
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