The chart below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The chart below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
To begin
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with, the diagram shows
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yemen
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Yemen
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and
italy
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Italy
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population ages in 2000, and predicting for 2050.
Firstly
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, in 2000, most of Italy's population consisted of 15-59 years with 61.6%, followed
up
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60+ years with 24.1%, and
lastly
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0-14
age
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group
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the
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had the
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least population has 14.3%.
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, projections of 2050 in Italy, 15-59 saw a massive decrease but
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still hold the number one spot by 46.2%, and close to it, 60+saw a significant increase with 42.3%,
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but not least, 0-14 saw a slight decrease to 11.5%.
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,
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Yemen
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in Yemen
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in 2000, the
age
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group
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of 0-14 is the highest between 60+ and 15-59 , with 50.1, very close to it is 15-59 , with 46.3, and
last
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by not least is 60+ , with a low 3.6%.
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, the prediction for
Yemen
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in 2050, 15-59 now hold the 1st spot by an astonshing 57.3%, 0-14
age
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group
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saw a massive decrease to 37.0%,
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60+ saw a slight increase to 5.7%.
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, the projection for 2050 in both countries is not the same
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the number one spot is the 15-59
age
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group
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,
while
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in
italy
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Italy
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, the 2nd is 60+, and 3rd is 0-14.
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Yemen
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2nd place 0-14
age
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group
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and the 60+
age
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group
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the
last
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, age, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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