task 2: Some people think news has no connection to people’s life. Therefore, it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television program. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
One school of thought holds that
news
does not connect to human life, and spending time reading the newspaper as well as
watching television
news
programs
is wasteful. While
acknowledging the reasons behind this
sentiment, I would contend that news
has a particular connection to lives
and time expended on newspaper and TV news
is valuable.
On the one hand, it is understandable why some people believe that there is no connection between their lives
and the news
besides
the lawlessness of reading the news
and watching the news
on TV. The key rationale could be that reported news
recently has been filled with untruthfulness and trivial stories, which can be attributed to the advancements in technology allowing anyone to report news
and to update these on social platforms without stringent censoring. For instance
, there are
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amount of Add an article
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news
about influencers’ lives
and gossip about the events happening with them on Facebook or Instagram, while
these stories do not benefit any aspects of people’s lives
regardless of entertainment means. As a result
, many find watching these
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news
on TV programs
or reading newspapers ineffective.
On the other hand
, I am convinced that news
has a tight connection to society, and watching and reading news
are
advantageous. The first reason could be that government-monitored or renowned newspaper channels have the responsibility for validly updating and reflecting controversial topics about important facets of life Change the verb form
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such
as national economics, criminal rates and moral issues. This
means to give people not only the awareness of what is happening around them but also
forecast the future based on current events for the most optimal decisions. In addition
, watching television
news
programs
illustrates to viewers reliable documents for what the news
has been reported, helping them to recognize the actions they should take. For example
, thanks to the widespread of
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documents on Correct word choice
historical
television
and the contribution of journalists in publishing information about the 1945’s
hunger in the north of Vietnam, many ethnic and citizens throughout the country aided hungry people with money and rice to overcome the situation. Up to these days, the film about the previous century’s hunger has been shown several times for generations of students as a teaching method to convey the harshness of war.
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while
there are justifications for the belief that news
does not have any relation to people’s life
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,
and that reading and watching the Remove the comma
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news
are time-wasting, I firmly believe that news
has brought much value to human beings, and time spent on reading the news
and watching television
news
programs
is worthful.Submitted by mylinhlee27 on
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task response
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task response
Main points are well-developed and sufficiently supported with relevant specific examples.
Word Count
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