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The pie chart below shows the highest level of education achieved by people over age 21 in two different countries.

The pie chart below shows the highest level of education achieved by people over age 21 in two different countries.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of people over 21 at five different education levels in
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 A and
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 B.
Overall
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, secondary school represented over one-third of the total in both nations,
whereas
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 people with no schooling accounted for the least common category. Looking in more detail, secondary school graduates made up the majority of adults aged over 21 in
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 A, at 45%. A similar pattern can be seen in
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 B, where 35% of those completed secondary education. The vocational or technical qualification was identical in both countries, standing at 30%.
In contrast
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, the percentage of those who went to university recorded 25% in B,
while
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 only 5% in A.
On the other hand
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, 15% of young people over-21s in
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 A only achieved the primary level, compared with just 5% in the other state.
However
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, those who did not receive any formal learning showed the smallest figure in both places, at 5% each.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words country with synonyms.
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