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The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.

The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.
The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of abroad
students
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 from the US,
The
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 UK and Australia from 2002 to 2007.
Overall
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, American and British
students
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 who studied abroad experienced some alterations during the period, meanwhile abroad pupils from Australia
remained
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abroad remained
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same
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the same
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number
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 in 6 years in a row.
To begin
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 with, almost 50,000 American
students
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 went abroad in 2002, the highest
number
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between
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among
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three
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the three
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 countries.
However
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, the
number
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 began to
dropped
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, and reached approximately 45,000 pupils in 2004. Evidently, abroad
students
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 from America
continued
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abroad continued
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 to increase and
achieved
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reached
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 50,000
students
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 and
became
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becoming
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 the highest
number
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 of
abroad
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apply
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students
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 in 2007. In the initial period, the UK sent
their
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its
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youngster's
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youngsters
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 abroad by 30,000 individuals from 2002 and 2003. For some
reasons
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reason
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, the numbers reduced from 2004, and reached less than 25,000
student
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students
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at the end
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 of the period.
Lastly
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, the
number
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 of abroad's in Australia experienced stagnancy, only 10,000
students
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 per
years
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year
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 from 2002 to 2007 and became the lowest
number
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 of
students
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 abroad amongst other countries.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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