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The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart provides key information about the percentages of the main reasons for using Social Networks, Email, Digital Camera and
Phone
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 Calls in Africa from 2016 to 2019. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the proportion of the main reasons for using Social Networks accounted for the highest percentage,
while
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 the proportion of the main reasons for using
Phone
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 Calls represented the lowest share. In 2016, the largest proportion was recorded for using Social Networks, at 50%.
This
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 was followed by Email, which made up 25%. Meanwhile, using Digital cameras and
Phone
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 Calls accounted for smaller shares, at 15% and 10%.
In contrast
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, in 2019, the percentage of use of Social Media increased to 56%.
Similarly
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, the use of Email showed a downward trend to 19%.
On the other hand
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, the use of
Phone
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 calls illustrated some fluctuations in 2017, an upward trend to 13% and in 2019 showed a decrease to 5%.
Whereas
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 the share of using Digital Cameras became higher than before.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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