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The table gives information about the number of international tourists arrivals in eight countries in 2009 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table gives information about the number of international tourists arrivals in eight countries in 2009 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table chart illustrates the number of individuals who went
tourism
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on tourism
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 around 8 different countries in the years 2009 and 2010.
Overall
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, we can see that France and the United States had the highest number of visitors in both years shown,
while
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 Germany and Hong Kong had the lowest.
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,
it is clear that
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 2010 was the year with the most tourists. At the beginning of the period (2009), the UK and Spain had identical figures, and the same situation applied to both Germany and Hong Kong. Italy was in the top, being digit 3 with an exact 44, and for Turkey and China, the two of them had 32 and 22
respectively
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.
According to
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 the data in 2010, almost all of the nations given kept on increasing with
travelers
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 approaching, but unfortunately, that was not the case for Hong Kong; the
quantity
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number
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 of people coming decreased and diminished to 9.

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