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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to takle the issue?

Are you feeling hot
in
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this
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 summer? The temperature in recent years
is
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has been
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 rising and
keep
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keeps
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on having
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setting
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new
record
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records
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 in the highest temperature year by year. It is because of
the
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global warming, a serious and
alarmed
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alarming
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 issue around the
world
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. In
this
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 essay, we will discuss the causes of global warming and the measures
.
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 with, global warming is caused by the growth of
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population
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the population
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. Since there is
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an incresing
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incresing
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increasing
aging
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ageing
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population
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, the demand for
resources
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 like food and
lands
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land
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 is high
leading
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, leading
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 to
the
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deforestation. Deforestation means cutting down the
trees
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 in the forest, which
causing
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causes
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 the lack of
trees
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 in the area,
while
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 it is used for cattle ranching,
plantation
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plantations
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, and other commercial agricultural activities.
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This
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These
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 activities are used to produce more
resources
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 for the high
population
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 needs,
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 providing
meats
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meat
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 through cattle ranching, providing rosewood through
lgging
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logging
. Without the
trees
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, the
greenhouse
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 effect intensifies as no
trees
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 as carbon sink. The
greenhouse
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 gases
e.g.
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, e.g.
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 carbon dioxide, water
vapours
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vapour
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,
nitogen
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nitrogen
 are
remains
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remain
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 in the atmosphere, being trapped in the atmosphere with the heat. So, the global temperature increases. Global warming
is
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has
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 resulted. Apart from the increased
population
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, there is the illegal
use
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 of
resources
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 in less developed
counries
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countries
 (
LDCs
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).
LDCs
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is
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are
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 less advanced in
technology
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so
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, so
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 they are less likely to
use
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the
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renewable
energy
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 or advanced
technology
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 to generate power. Burning fossil fuel is common in
LDCs
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,
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 they would
use
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 coal, oil, natural gas
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, ect
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ect
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etc.
, which release
numerious
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numerous
greenhouse
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 gases. The power plants, industries,
vehicles
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and vehicles
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 are the main uses of these fossil fuels.
Moreover
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,
illegally
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illegal
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commerical
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commercial
 logging is common in
LDCs
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 as they
use
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 it to earn
higher
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a higher
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 income to repay the bonds from other countries. These are all the activities leading to the primary cause of global warming,
intensifies
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which intensifies
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 the
greenhouse
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 effect by
incresed
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increasing
greenhouse
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 gases. To
takle
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tackle
 the issue, governments around the
world
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 could
colabrate
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collaborate
 with one another. More developed countries (MDCs) like
USA
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the USA
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,
Canda
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Canada
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,
Japan
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and Japan
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 could provide some advanced
technology
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 to the
LDCs
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, like Indonesia, China,
Nepal
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and Nepal
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. With the help of high-tech,
such
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 as hybrid vehicles,
LDCs
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 would burn less fossil fuels, replaced by
the
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apply
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renewable
energy
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 from
the
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apply
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nature
like
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, like
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 solar
energy
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 and wind
energy
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. The
imported
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importation
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 of finance and
technology
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 from MDCs would be a huge improvement in
LDCs
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 and even all around the
world
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, in
tem
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terms
 of helping global warming.
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 governments,
us
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we
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, the
individuals
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individuals,
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also could
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could also
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 help. First of all, people should
rasie
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raise
 the awareness of the
serious
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seriousness
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 of global warming
by
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through
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 education from
internet
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the internet
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 or school. We should
use
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 he 4R methods in daily life, which
is
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are
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 recycle, reduce, reuse and
recover
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recycle
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 to maintain a
sustainalble
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sustainable
 life, which is the cheapest and easiest way to relieve global warming by
indiviuals
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individuals
. For
exampe
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example
, reuse the paper, turn off the light when it is not
neccessary
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necessary
.
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, being vegetarian might be a solution since it
reduce
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reduces
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 the demand for
meats
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meat
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, like beef, pork, which might help the forest
that
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since
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less
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fewer
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trees
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 are cut down to a falt
land
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way
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 for cattle ranching.
To sum up
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,
intensified
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the intensified
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greenhouse
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 effect is the primary cause of
increaing
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increasing
 global warming, which
caused
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is caused
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 by the increased
population
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 and the
use
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 of
resources
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 in
LDCs
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. Both governments and residents around the
world
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 would be a band-aid to the
world
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 by
soothin
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soothing
 the global warming.

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Task Response
Plan your essay. Make a clear order: intro, cause, measure, then conclusion. Use one idea per paragraph. Keep to the task.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make your ideas fit well. Use simple links to move from one idea to next. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence. Use mostly simple spellings and short sentences to keep flow.
Strength
The essay tries to cover both causes and action.
Strength
There are some ideas on what people and gov can do.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • causes
  • effects
  • heat
  • air
  • earth
  • world
  • energy
  • oil
  • gas
  • coal
  • transport
  • factory
  • industry
  • car
  • bus
  • train
  • walk
  • bike
  • public
  • rule
  • law
  • tax
  • price
  • pollution
  • clean
  • wind
  • sun
  • water
  • tree
  • forest
  • plant
  • grow
  • save
  • reuse
  • recycle
  • meat
  • together
  • action
  • future
  • time
  • now
  • need
  • make
  • plan
  • step
  • country
  • person
  • people
  • government
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