A knowledge of maths isn’t important for many jobs nowadays. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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these days do not require mathematical proficiency. I completely agree with
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there are
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that require empathy and emotional connection. The primary reason why I hold
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view is
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advancement
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the advancement
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in artificial intelligence as which is being increasingly used in most of the
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computational
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tasks.
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many organisations are actively incorporating AI to perform calculations and predictions based on
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past trends. If machines can perform complex calculations, there is no need to have knowledge of complex mathematical equations.
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, these days there are various software
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as Xero, which can handle complex accounting data
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can be operated by any individual having basic computer literacy. Another reason why maths is not that crucial because there are
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like counselling and
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service sector where employees need to deal with people
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numbers. When a therapist sees their clients, there is no need to talk about the numbers and data. If people working in
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as social
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have to deal with numbers, it may decrease their performance and increase burnout.
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a psychologist
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working with a patient dealing with depression does not
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to do
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a complex
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mathematical equation to resolve the issue. In conclusion, mathematical knowledge is not that essential in
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rapid development in technology
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there are
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where professionals need to deal with emotions
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jobs
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do not need knowledge of maths.

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Two main ideas are used: AI in math and people work.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
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  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
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  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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