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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Every year, many
languages
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 disappear. Some people believe that
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 does not matter because having fewer
languages
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 will make communication easier worldwide. I completely disagree with
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 opinion because
languages
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 preserve cultural identity and promote creativity.
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 with, linguistic diversity enriches our world. Each
language
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 reflects the history, values, and lifestyle of its speakers. When a
language
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 dies, a unique way of thinking
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 disappears.
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, the works of prominent Persian poets
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 as Hafez and Saadi illustrate how
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 shapes literature and cultural philosophy. If their writings had originally been in English, much of the cultural meaning, symbolism, and poetic structure would have been lost.
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 demonstrates that creativity is strongly connected to linguistic diversity.
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, preserving
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 can support economic growth. Tourism often relies on cultural uniqueness;
travelers
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 are attracted to destinations because of their traditions,
languages
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, and stories.
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, losing
languages
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 can reduce cultural appeal and potential income for local communities. Admittedly, speaking many
languages
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 may create practical challenges. Communication barriers can make travel or business difficult, and in some
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 tourists may feel vulnerable to scams when they do not understand the local
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.
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, linguistic differences may lead to social tension; children who speak minority
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 sometimes face discrimination at school.
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, these issues can be addressed with translation technology, inclusive education, and public awareness. The solution is not to eliminate
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, but to promote mutual respect and provide support for multilingual communities. In conclusion,
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 having fewer
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 might seem convenient, the cultural, intellectual, and economic value of linguistic diversity is far greater.
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, efforts should be made to preserve endangered
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 and celebrate them as an essential part of our global heritage.

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task response
Your view is clear and you give good examples. Keep this use of strong stance in future essays.
coherence
Link ideas more clearly. Use small, direct links between points so the reader can see the flow.
coherence
Some long sentences are hard to read. Use shorter sentences to help reader and keep simple words.
content
Clear position and good choice of ideas.
structure
Good sequence from point to point with a simple path.
overall
Good end that repeats the main idea.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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