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In most elementary and high schools in Asia, students are required to wear uniforms. What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing school uniforms?

There is no denying the fact that people's image is
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 of the most important things when they deal with the community.
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,
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 uniforms should be acceptable under clear rules.
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 it is a commonly held belief that the
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 of having a specific
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uniform
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 are more than the
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.
This
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both
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 and
disadvantages
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. On
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 hand,
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 of the crucial
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 of having a standard academy
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 is to decrease the cost of clothes that the parents have to buy for their children.
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, if
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 wear a
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, their family will not needs to buy more than
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 or two uniforms every academic year.
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, having a specific
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 decreases financial differences between
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.
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, all
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 will wear the same dress code without any luxury brands no matter of their financial state.
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, there are some
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, as high
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students
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 start to discover their personality. It is
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 possible to say that having a dress code will minimise their ability to show their identity to society.
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, in
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 age, some girls like to wear casual pants rather than wear skirts in their
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uniform
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. In conclusion, there are many
advantages
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 of
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 uniforms , and it depends on the community's point of view about
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 topic. It is
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 true that there are a lot of
disadvantages
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 , and we should take them into account and see the weight of benefits and risks to make a decision to confirm the policy of dress code.

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task response
Plan your essay before you write. Say what you will say, then say it.
coherence
One idea per paragraph. Make a short plan so the flow is clear.
coherence
Use easy connecting words to show order, like first, then, also, but, finally.
task response
Give one or two clear examples and explain them in simple words.
structure
The essay has parts for intro, body, and end.
content
There are real examples about cost and choice of clothes.
coherence
Link words help the flow go from one idea to the next.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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