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Some people believe that it’s appropriate for children to learn a foreign language in primary school. Does the advantage of this outweigh its disadvantage?

In recent years, the issue of learning foreign
languages
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 from childhood has become a widely discussed topic.It is always argued that being Bilingual is challenging for young people.
However
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,l believe that knowing foreign
languages
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beneficial
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is beneficial
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 for
children
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.
To begin
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 with
it
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, it is important to consider the fact that in primary
school
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school,
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children
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 want to be more
relax
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relaxed
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, they
need just
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just need
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 to play with peers.It is really vital for their healthy growth.
While
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 learning foreign
languages
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 might be stressful for them,because they feel pressure to learn and understand
structure
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the structure
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 of
new
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the new
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 language.
On the other hand
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, it is true that knowing foreign
languages
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have
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has
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 myriad advantages.
For instance
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,there are tons of
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studies on
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 how beneficial learning new
languages
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 from childhood
.
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is.firts
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The firts
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firts
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first
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study
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 was between 5-10 years old
children
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,
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apply
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they took
brain
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a brain
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 scan.
bilingual
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Bilingual
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children
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's
brain
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brains
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 were active and more creative
compare
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compared
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 to monolingual
children
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.Researchers claim that
,
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apply
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foreign language
widend
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widens
children
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's outlook,
aid
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aids
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 them to expand their creativity and
improve
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improves
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problem solving
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problem-solving
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 skills.
To sum up
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, there
are
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is
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 a lot of evidence
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that learning
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 foreign
languages
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 from childhood
have
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has
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 endless benefits.

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planning
Plan your essay before writing. Start with a clear intro that states your view. End with a short conclusion that restates it.
grammar
Use simple, correct sentences. Watch verb forms and spelling, like 'bilingual' 'brain' 'widend' and others.
content
Give one or two examples that directly back your point and explain how they show the idea.
coherence
Make your points in order, with clear links. Use phrases like firstly, on the other hand, in addition, therefore.
idea
Some good try to discuss both sides of the issue.
coherence
Some link words are used to move from one part to another.
content
There is an attempt to give a real example about language study.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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