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Some people say that distance learning is a quick and effective way to study. Others, however, disagree and say that distance learning programs can never be as good as courses taken in person. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

It is often thought that remote education is efficient than onsite learning. I strongly agree with
this
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 statement, as online
courses
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 allow
students
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 to study flexibly at their own pace and
generally
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are generally
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 more affordable than on-campus programs
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 essay will discuss two reasons why it is better for learners to choose online
classes
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 in detail. First of all, online
courses
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 allow
students
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 to freely manage their schedules and places to learn. Most face-to-face schoolings have fixed
time
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 tables and locations, so they need to manage their schedules because of them.
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, they need to commute to attend
classes
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, which is
time
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-consuming.
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, remote schooling learners can spend more
time
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 improving themselves in their careers or have quality
time
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 with their families.
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, they are able to read journal articles, look up their CVs to improve or take other online
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 for their career paths,
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 others spend their
time
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 going to school and back home.
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, if they take distance learning programs, the limitations of
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 and space are resolved.
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, taking online learning programs is cost-effective in various ways. If
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 take them
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 of traditional learning, they can save money.
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 education has a higher tuition fee,
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 accommodations, learning materials, and salaries for tutors.
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, expenditures for commuting cannot be neglectable, especially for those who have limited financial abilities.
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, in a specific Australian university, the tuition fee difference between online
classes
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 and offline ones is three times, so most
students
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 applied to online
courses
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.
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, it is better to take distance schooling when it comes to money. In conclusion, I believe enrolling in online
classes
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 is a better option in terms of flexibility and cost-effectiveness.

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task response
Be clear from the start. State your view and the main points in order.
content
Give more detail on how online classes help and add one or two small, real ideas as examples.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words so the plan moves well from intro to body to end.
lexical
Use simple everyday words. Keep long sentences short so the reader can follow.
grammar
Check small mistakes like verbs and commas.
task response
The writer states a clear view in the intro.
coherence
Two main reasons are given and they are explained.
structure
The essay has a clear plan with four parts (intro, 2 bodies, conclusion).
Topic Vocabulary:
  • **Useful Vocabulary:**
  • 1. **Distance learning**: A way of studying where tuition is carried out over the Internet or other electronic media.
  • 2. **Flexible schedule**: Time-table that allows students to manage their own study hours.
  • 3. **Remote access**: The ability to access educational content from any location.
  • 4. **Cost-effective**: Economical; good value in relation to the money, time, or effort spent.
  • 5. **Digital literacy**: The ability to effectively use digital tools and platforms.
  • 6. **Self-discipline**: The ability to control one's behavior, emotions, and thoughts in the pursuit of long-term goals.
  • 7. **Hands-on experience**: Practical experience in a field of study, usually gained through physical participation.
  • 8. **Technological barriers**: Challenges related to the availability or use of technology.
  • 9. **Employer perception**: The way that employers view or regard a qualification or skill.
  • 10. **In-person interaction**: Face-to-face communication and engagement.
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