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The most important reason for a young person to attend a university is to increase the amount of money that he/she will earn in future. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some individuals think that going to tertiary increases the chances of getting rich. I
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however
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, however
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, totally disagree with
this
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 statement because a person can have a lot of
money
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 without education
and
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, and
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 a lot of learned people are poor these days.
To begin
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 with, going to university is not a guarantee that a person will earn a lot of
money
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.
Infact
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In fact
,
unlearned
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uneducated
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 individuals are the employers of the educated. To illustrate, in my community, there are industries owned by people without degrees. They employ graduates from different tertiary institutions. Their salaries are obviously less than
that
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those
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 of their bosses.
Hence
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being
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, being
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 educated is unfortunately useless
this
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 century. Moving forward, attaining a degree certificate does not help at all because most learned individuals are very poor. Education is just
over rated
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overrated
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.
For instance
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, in Zimbabwe, a certain study showed that tertiary graduates are suffering in life. Some of them are now vendors. They even wear their graduation gowns when selling vegetables. Education has become a joke. I,
therefore
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, fully disagree with the notion that going to school can be a way of getting more
money
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 in the future.
To conclude
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, the essay above totally disagrees with the idea that having a degree might mean earning more
money
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 in the future. The reasons being that the learned in
the
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apply
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society
are
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is
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 very poor and they work for the unlearned.

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Task Response
Plan before you write. Say your view in the intro and keep the same view in the conclusion.
Task Response
Give clear reasons and some proof or example.
Coherence and Cohesion
One idea per paragraph and a clear main idea in each.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use simple link words to join sentences, like and, but, also.
Language Use
Check grammar and fix small errors like capitalization and spelling.
Language Use
Be careful with facts and avoid weak claims.
Strength
Clear stance against the idea.
Strength
Some use of linking words to guide reader.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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