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Writing Samples
Band 2

Many people think governments should spend money only on medical care and education and not theaters or sports stadiums. Do you agree or disagree?

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. 1A-C
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, AR and LebRb neurons overlapped in the hypothalamus. Deleting the receptor worked, and DHT enlarged the anogenital
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 in every group. Lepr signals were absent before birth, so the change came only after life. Later, weight, fat and glucose stayed much the same, as shown in
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. 2A-E, and metabolism held steady. Puberty came late in androgen-exposed females, with or without the receptor, as seen in
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. 3A-D; the loss of AR in LebRb cells didn’t alter that delay, yet females without the receptor regained regular cycles and more corpora lutea (
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. 4A-D, 5A-F). Even so, hormone and gene readings in the pituitary and hypothalamus stayed flat (
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 6A-I). Deleting AR in LepRb neurons left metabolism steady and restored fertility after prenatal androgen exposure, exactly as the authors proposed

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General
Add an opening sentence that states the main idea or purpose; include a brief overview.
Organization
Improve flow by using linking words to connect ideas; use more signposts like however, also, in addition.
Accuracy
Clarify terms and avoid unclear expressions; check for typos or language mistakes (e.g., 'gab' instead of 'gap').
Clarity
Provide fewer abbreviations or define them when first used; ensure the text can be understood by general readers.
Coherence
Ensure a clear sequence of results; group related findings and reference figures consistently.
Content
Uses figures to back up statements and shows data-driven reporting.
Structure
Chronological/natural order of results; logical sequence of experiments.
Language
Mostly correct grammar and tense usage for scientific reporting.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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