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The diagram below shows the process of growing and preparing pineapples and pineapple products.

The diagram below shows the process of growing and preparing pineapples and pineapple products.
The diagram illustrates the various stages involved in the cultivation of pineapples and the preparation of pineapple-based products.
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, the process consists of three main stages, beginning with the growth of pineapple plants and ending with the packaging of both fresh and processed products. It has both industrial and
agriculture
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 steps. At the initial stage, pineapples are planted and cultivated under suitable weather conditions in 23-30 degrees. The growth of one pineapple takes about a year.During
this
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 time, they are ethalined and
nce
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once
 they reach the size of about 30
centimeters
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 and
abot
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about
 2kilogramms , they are harvested. After harvesting,
while
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 the third of fruits are
transformated
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transformed
 into a juice by slicing them and adding an
extrcactor
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extractor
, the other part
are
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also
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slayed
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sliced
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 and canned to sell as
a not fresh
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non-fresh
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 fruit. There is a part of pineapples which are waxed first before exporting to
another
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other
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countriesby
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countries by
 divergent transport
such
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 as planes and trucks , they are waxed in
oreder
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order
 to keep their freshness
uring
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 the long trips.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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