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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
The two maps depict the information
how
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on how
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 the layout of the public library has changed over a period of 20 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the most noticeable change is
that
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apply
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the development of
children's
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the children's
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 book area
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such
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, such
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 as
fiction
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books
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 and storytelling events.
Additionally
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, a cafe has been constructed in place of an enquiry desk, where it has relocated
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along
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, along
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 with adult
fiction
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books
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.
To begin
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 with, earlier CDs, videos and computer games were located in the north-west
side
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 of the map, which is now completely modified with juvenile
fiction
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books
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, events and
couple
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a couple
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 of sofas. On the other
side
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,
reading
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the reading
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 room has
altered
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been altered
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 to
computer
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a computer
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 room.
Similarly
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, a
children
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children's
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rooms
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room
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 has turned into
the
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a
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 lecture room. Another noticeable transformation is that,
an
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the
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 introduction of a cafe in the south-east
side
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 of the map. Interestingly,
an
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the
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 information desk has
modernised
Verb problem
been modernised
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 with the self-service machines among the adult
fiction
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books
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,
whereas
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 on the opposite
side
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 of the information desk is converted into
the all
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an
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reference
Use the right word
all-reference
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books
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.
Check wording
section.
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Last
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 but not least, chairs and tables
has
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have
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 been removed to give enough space in the library.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fiction, books, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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