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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018
The bar graph illustrates the comparative data about how families spent their weekly income from 1968 to 2018 in one country.
Overall
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, the most notable change over the period is the sharp decrease in
spendings
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spending
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 on food,
while
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 leisure became the largest expenditure category in 2018.
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, the proportion spent on fuel and power remained the lowest for both years, averaging 5%. Now getting back to details,
In
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in
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1968
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1968,
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 almost a third of weekly income was spent on food, but
this
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percent
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percentage
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 dropped significantly to around 15 %. In 1968, housing expenses and
clothing&footwear
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clothing and footwear
spendings
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spending
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 were exactly the same
,
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on the other hand
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, housing expenses doubled from about 10% to 20%. Clothing and footwear experienced the opposite trend, as percentages were halved in 2018. Meanwhile, the share of household goods remained unchanged at approximately 4%. These figures clearly show how family priorities have
been
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changed
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due to
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over
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 50
year
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50-year
 period.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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