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Writing Samples
Band 1

the illustration below shows fire exit plan in a college accomodation

This
Linking Words
 map shows
emergency
Correct article usage
the emergency
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 exit plan in a student housing.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is
seen
Verb problem
apply
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clearly
Replace the word
clear
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it
Correct word choice
that it
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 has two meeting places 
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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has
Verb problem
are
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 already shown
in
Change preposition
on
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 the map. The accommodation shows two staircases, seven bedrooms,
lift
Correct article usage
a lift
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and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 a huge hallway can
see
Verb problem
shown
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  in
this
Linking Words
 plan. On the left side of
building
Correct article usage
the building
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, Bedrooms 1, 2 and 3 are near
to
Change preposition
apply
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the first staircase to
the
Correct article usage
apply
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Meeting
point
Fix capitalization
Point
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 1 outside the housing. On the right side of
edifice
Correct article usage
the edifice
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, Bedrooms 4, 5, 6 and 7 are located nearly to the second stairway
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 leads to Meeting point 2 outside of the house.
Although
Linking Words
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 an elevator
Linking Words
also
Fix capitalization
Also
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 situated near the second stair,
therefore
Linking Words
,
this
Linking Words
 would generally not be used in emergencies.

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task
Task response: Give a clear idea of the map. Say the main parts and what helps people find the exit. Use a short overall sentence and a short list of main points.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Put ideas in a clear order. Start with a short intro, then talk about the left side, then the right side. Use simple link words to join ideas.
language
Language: Use easy words. Check small grammar problems and stay with one word form (for example 'near' not 'near to').
details
Details: Name key places well, like which rooms are near which stairs and where the meeting points are.
content
Clear view of the two meeting points
organization
Plan uses left and right side to describe areas
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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