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this ullustrates below shows fire exit in a college accomadation

The picture shows the fire exit plan in a hall of residents.
Overall
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,the photo shows that there are seven
bedrooms
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, one main
corridor
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, and two staircases leading to different meeting points. In terms of layout, seven
bedrooms
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 connected by a main
corridor
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Punctuation problem
. Bedrooms
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bedrooms
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 1 and 2 are situated on the left side of the
corridor
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,
while
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bedrooms
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 4, 5, 6, and 7 are placed on the right. Bedroom 3 is located near the middle, close to the left staircase. There is
also
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 a lift at the far right corner, providing convenient access between floors. The
corridor
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 links all rooms and ensures easy movement around the accommodation. Regarding the fire exit plan, residents from
bedrooms
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 1 to 3 should use the left stairs and proceed to meeting point 1,
while
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 those from
Bedrooms
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 4 to 7 must go through the right stairs leading to meeting point 2 for safety.

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grammar
Fix the text by adding a dot at the end of ideas. Use short sentences when needed and join ideas with a comma or 'and'.
task management
Add a short opening line to state what the picture shows and a short ending line to sum up.
structure
Break long thoughts into two parts. Use a clear order: first the plan of rooms, then the exit plan.
content
Be clear on where each room sits and keep the exact numbers.
cohesion
Use link words like 'then', 'next', 'also' to connect ideas.
content
The text names rooms and shows the plan in order.
content
The two meeting points are clear in the plan.
structure
Numbers help show place and order in the layout.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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