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‘Time is money.’ To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

Urbanization
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 and modern life have presented
people
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 with a large number of challenges.
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, the crux of the matter is related to managing among city dwellers.
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 some opine
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people
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that people
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 should be really careful about their
time
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, in my view,
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 no one dares to deny the importance of
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, it is almost impossible to be on
time
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. On the one hand, being on
time
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 goes a long way in decreasing the rate of stress. To clarify, if
people
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 do not have enough
time
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 to perform their tasks and desired activities, they may suffer from unbalanced work-life, which can pose a threat to their mental health, as they feel a lot of pressure
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unfulfilled
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 promises.
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, I myself, when I cannot be on
time
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 for my appointments, it really sends me into a rage, since I have always been taught from the earliest years of my life by my parents to place a high value on my
time
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.
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, making a to-do list for the next day is a top priority for me.
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,
time
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 management is one of the biggest challenges in
this
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 machine-oriented life. Everybody is suffering from hurry. They have to work from dawn to dusk to meet their daily demands. They are always in a hurry to adapt to a fast-paced lifestyle of
urbanization
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.
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 to getting stuck in traffic jams, especially in big cities
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where
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 residents spend most of their
time
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 commuting, it is no wonder they can not be on
time
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 almost all the
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, but it is not as if they do not care about their
time
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.
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,
people
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 got used to being flexible about their appointments. If the government forces dwellers to
prioritize
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 punctuality regardless of their situations, they may develop some mental disorders,
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 as anxiety. In conclusion, the fact that managing
time
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 is imperative is obvious to all, but it does not necessarily mean individuals should follow it at any cost. I believe
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that, in
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this
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 modern world, the high-ranking officials are in charge of addressing
this
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 issue by considering
people
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’s mental health

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task response
State your view clearly at the start and stay on the topic of whether time is money.
task response
Make a short plan before you write: 3 ideas with one clear example for each.
coherence and cohesion
Organize into 4 clear paragraphs: introduction, two body parts, and a short conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words to show order and cause, like first, also, but, therefore.
grammar
Check small errors: use cannot instead of can not, and fix other small grammar mistakes.
structure
You use signpost words to show two sides (on the one hand / on the other hand).
content
You give a personal example, which makes your point feel real.
coherence
There is a clear final idea and a short ending.
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