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Band 7

You recently made a journey by train. When you got on the train, you realised you had left a bag on the platform. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter: describe the bag and its contents explain where and when you lost the bag say what you would like the company to do

Dear Station Manager, I am writing to report a bag that I accidentally left on the platform before boarding my train. On Wednesday, 13th November, at around 8:00 p.m., I boarded the 9:00 a.m. train from Chișinău to Iași. I realised shortly after departure that I had left one of my bags on the platform near the waiting benches, close to the ticket office. The bag is a small pink handbag with a gold zipper and a fluffy, round, bay pink keychain. Inside, there is some cash, two lip products, a gel,
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 pen and a gold house key.
Inside
Punctuation problem
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 be my gym membership. I would be very grateful if you could check whether the bag has been found and kept in the lost property office. If it has been located, I could come to the station to collect it or arrange for it to be sent to my address by post. Thank you very much for your assistance. Yours faithfully, Christina Cerchez

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task response
You tell the bag, its items, when and where you lost it, and what you want. This fits the task.
coherence
The text is in good order. It has three parts and keeps flow. The ideas go in the right order.
cohesion
Use short linking words like and, then, also to join ideas. It helps link sentences.
task reqs
Check the date and time to avoid mixed facts. A clear fact helps the reader.
content suggestion
Say how you want the bag to be sent or picked up and give a way to contact you.
tone
Polite tone and proper opening and close
content
Clear note on what is in the bag
task response
Clear request for action
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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