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Some students choose to study in another country for a time during high school or university. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad?

Nowadays, some
students
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 want to
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get an
 education in foreign countries. They applied in
schools
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the schools
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 and universities sectors
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 their qualification.
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 studying abroad offers benefits, it
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 poses significant challenges.
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, studying abroad with foreign
people
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 in university or school helps international
students
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 to communicate better. When they prepare assignments and representations together
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 help each other with difficult concepts. In
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 way, international
students
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 become proficient and well-communicated
people
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 with foreigners.
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, by spending time
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studying
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 in a foreign country, they can
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learn
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 about the culture and traditions of
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people
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. Especially, we would know about different kinds of amazing foods and traditional clothes that foreigners eat and wear on occasions.
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, learning about subjects from a person who is from another race is
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 a major benefit for international
students
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.
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 method will develop our way of thinking and we will get many accomplishments in future.
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, there are some major problems for those who want to study abroad. Specifically,
students
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 face accommodation problems. Recently, Many cases have been reported in the United Kingdom, and in these reports ,
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 over 1000 international
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 were forced to sleep outdoors.
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, managing the fee and daily life expenses is
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 quite hard for
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 because
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 countries have specific policies and laws.
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 these regulations, international
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 are not allowed to work more than 20 to 30 hours. If anyone breaks
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 policy , immigration will immediately deport
him
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 to
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their
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 home country. Because of it, their mental health gets disturbed and they start to
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experience
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 more stress. In conclusion, I would recommend to
students
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 that if their families are wealthy
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people
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,
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 studying abroad will be the best choice of their life.
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 it is challenging but after a dark night there is a beautiful day

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grammar
Fix grammar and make full sentences. Use simple, direct language.
structure
Plan your essay with an outline: intro, 2 body paragraphs, and a short conclusion.
coherence
Write a clear topic sentence for each paragraph and stay on one main idea.
content
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content
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grammar
Check spelling and punctuation, like commas after introductory phrases.
content
Some good balance of the topic: advantages and disadvantages are discussed.
idea
There is an effort to give examples about culture and studying abroad.
structure
Paragraphs show some order and basic linking.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exposure
  • Diverse cultures
  • Global awareness
  • Improves language skills
  • Enhances employment prospects
  • Develops independence
  • Self-reliance
  • Homesickness
  • Cultural shock
  • High costs
  • Tuition
  • Living expenses
  • Educational systems
  • Styles of teaching
  • Isolated
  • Disconnected
  • Reintegrating
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