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The graph below shows the sales of children's books ,adult fiction and education books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.

The graph below shows the sales of children's books ,adult fiction and education books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.
The line
carth
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chart
 illustrates
the
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apply
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how much money in
million
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millions
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dollars
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of dollars
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earned
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was earned
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 from 3 kinds of
books
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 from 2002 to 2006 in a country.
Overall
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, children's
books
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 and Educational
books
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 became more popular over the years
while
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 Adult fiction
descreased
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decreased
. In 2002, Adult fiction was one of the most popular
books
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but
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 it gradually dipped
by
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over
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 the 4 years
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whereas
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, whereas
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 other
books
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 increased slightly.
Children
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Children's
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books
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 gained
upmoving
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an upward
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 trend until
end
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the end
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 of the chart. Adult fiction
overtook
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was overtaken
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 by Children's
books
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 in 2003. Educational
books
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which
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, which
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is
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were
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third
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the third
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 most
saled
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sold
 book in
2002
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2002,
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 increased steeply for
first
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the first
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 year. After
that
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that,
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 it lost
his
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its
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 popularity
within
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between
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 2003 and 2005. In
2005
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2005,
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 Educational
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books
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book
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 sales increased and became
second
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the second
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 most popular
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books
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book
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 in
country
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the country
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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