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Some students choose to study in another country for a time during high school or university. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad?

There is no denying the fact that studying abroad has become a topic of
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 concern in today’s world.
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 some people believe that local schools and universities are more efficient, others argue that studying abroad can open better opportunities.
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 issue reflects an essential truth about education in both local and foreign countries, which requires careful attention and analysis. In the following paragraphs, I will examine the key points and provide relevant examples to support the discussion.
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 will not only study their major, but they will
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 learn the culture of the host country,
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 the language, which can benefit them on a personal level and later on when applying for jobs.
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, if two
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 apply for the same job with similar skills, but one of them is fluent in another language
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 there are many
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 that unable
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 to the new environment. In
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, many schools and universities are located in developing countries, and student or their parents are often not fully aware of
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 to be considered carefully. By examining both its
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 and disadvantages,
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 can make informed decisions. It should be taken seriously for the benefit of both
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individuals
 and society.

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strength
Your essay covers both sides of the issue and gives a reason for each point. To raise the score, add more clear and strong reasons for each idea.
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There are many grammar mistakes and odd phrases. Fix errors to make your ideas clear.
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Use clear topic sentences at the start of each paragraph and link ideas with simple 'and', 'but', 'also' to show flow.
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Give a second, brief example for each side to show you can support ideas with details.
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The essay has a simple, clear layout (intro, body, conclusion).
content
It addresses both sides and uses an example to back a point.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exposure
  • Diverse cultures
  • Global awareness
  • Improves language skills
  • Enhances employment prospects
  • Develops independence
  • Self-reliance
  • Homesickness
  • Cultural shock
  • High costs
  • Tuition
  • Living expenses
  • Educational systems
  • Styles of teaching
  • Isolated
  • Disconnected
  • Reintegrating
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