Some people think that the modern technology is having a negative effect on social relationships. To what extent doyou agree or disagree?

It is believed that the advanced
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has bad effects on social relationships;
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lean towards
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view that the negative
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effects
will be stronger if we overuse it, but tech can help us stay in touch. To start with,
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modern tech can reduce face-to-face interaction, make conversations short or shallow, and
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lead to miscommunication. These devices increase screen time, which can distract from family and friends
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and most importantly, they can cause online jealousy and pressure to have a perfect life or risk of cyberbullying and privacy problems.
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, as the
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developments rose, the figures of depressed people increased as well. Because individuals,
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especially
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young people,
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became addicted to social media , and
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they start to compare their
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with those
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online devices, which causes mental health issues.
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, despite the negative effects of tech, it helps people keep in touch over
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distances; quick messages, video calls, and online groups , which bring them together, can give support and joy.
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, it can be useful to do remote jobs and online studies, even though
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you cannot be able to be present in person.
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,
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can talk to my grandparents, who are far away in another country, easily and every time without any
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ado just by the mercy of
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. In conclusion, in my view, the
technology
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doesn't
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our social life, if we use it in a balanced way and get its
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instead
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of giving ours to them.
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, in
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we overuse
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the drawbacks will outweigh its potential benefits.

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State a clear position at the start and keep it steady throughout the essay.
coherence
Give one or two good ideas and explain how they work to prove your point.
coherence
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language
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structure
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content
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example
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readability
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Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • devices
  • phone
  • internet
  • online
  • offline
  • social media
  • text
  • messages
  • video call
  • chat
  • app
  • connection
  • relationship
  • friend
  • family
  • bond
  • support
  • loneliness
  • empathy
  • misunderstanding
  • distraction
  • addiction
  • privacy
  • bullying
  • long-distance
  • face-to-face
  • in person
  • on the one hand
  • on the other hand
  • in my view
  • I believe
  • therefore
  • overall
  • keep in touch
  • talk face to face
  • set time limits
  • mindful use
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