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Some people think the main benefit of international cooperation is in protection of the environment, while others think that the main benefit is in the world business. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

International
cooperation
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 has become increasingly vital in the modern world.
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 some people believe that its greatest benefit lies in promoting global business, others argue that it mainly helps to protect the environment. In my opinion,
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 economic
cooperation
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 is important, environmental protection is a more essential and long-term goal. Those who
emphasize
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 international business
cooperation
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 believe that it encourages economic growth and creates job opportunities. When
countries
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 trade with each other, they can share resources, technologies, and commodities.
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 not only improves production efficiency but
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 strengthens diplomatic relations.
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, free tax agreements between
countries
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 have helped many developing nations access larger markets and improve living standards. To expand the scope of transactions, the company hopes that the relationship between
countries
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 is not easily affected.
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, environmental protection requires even closer global
cooperation
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. Issues
such
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 as climate change, ocean pollution, and deforestation cannot be solved by a single country. International
organizations
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 play a crucial role in reducing carbon emissions and promoting sustainable development. Most
countries
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 establish
the
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apply
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regulations to control the behavior of environmental pollution. When businessmen don’t follow the rules, the
countries
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 have the right to forbid the trades. These strict laws make it impossible for businessmen to ignore environmental issues. Without joint efforts, the world would face more serious natural disasters and loss of biodiversity. In conclusion,
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 international business
cooperation
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 brings clear economic advantages, I believe that protecting the environment is the most important benefit. Economic growth is temporary, but a healthy planet ensures the survival of future generations.

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grammar
Use simple, correct grammar. Some sentences are hard to read; break long sentences.
development
Improve idea depth. Add stronger, real examples or numbers to back claims.
lexical
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task
There is a clear view and it talks about both sides.
structure
Intro, body, and conclusion are in the right order.
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Link words help the flow of ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • global
  • cooperation
  • environment
  • pollution
  • club??
  • climate
  • treaty
  • agreement
  • standards
  • policy
  • fund
  • invest
  • investment
  • jobs
  • trade
  • growth
  • business
  • company
  • market
  • cost
  • benefit
  • risk
  • balance
  • long-term
  • short-term
  • development
  • tech
  • transfer
  • knowledge
  • help
  • world
  • country
  • local
  • global
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