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The chart below shows the donations given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the donations given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the donations distributed to six different types of charity by one enterprise over the period from 2012 to 2014.
Overall
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,
donation
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donations
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 given to social welfare
was
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were
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 the highest across the three years
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,
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while
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 other sectors received a much smaller percentage throughout the period. In detail, money attributed to social welfare decreased between 2013 and 2014 before it rose again and reached 24
thousand
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 funds in 2014.
However
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, the same case applied to donations dedicated to education and the environment, which dropped between 2012 and 2013 before increasing again in 2014, reaching 7
and
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thousand and
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 6
thousand
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 dollars
respectively
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, respectively
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.
Moreover
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, proportions accorded to health and wildlife increased over the period
reaching
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, reaching
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 10
thousand
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of
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apply
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dollar
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dollars
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 in 2014 for health ,
as well as
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 5
thousand
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of
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apply
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dollars for
widlife
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wildlife
 in the same year.
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on
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On
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 the other
hand
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hand,
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 donations for arts remained
smiliar
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similar
 in 2012 and 2013 , before
it
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they
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 went up from 2 to 4
thousands
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thousand
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of
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apply
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dollars by 2014 .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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