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Band 4

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Now , for every type of
vehicle
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vehicle,
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 we need a driver . As we know,
driver
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a driver
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 is the person
responsabile
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responsible
to follow
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for following
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 strict rules and
help
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helping
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 people get from point A to B or
drive
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driving
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them
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themselves
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self
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apply
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from
one
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 place to
onther
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another
. In my opinion ,
this
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 task is more risky
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then
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than
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 we imagine . But ,
its
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it's
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 still a job and a
sorce
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source
 of income for some .
Alao
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Also
if
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, if
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 there is no need to pay attention to the wheel , we
wold
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would
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 be free of
one
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 of the
never ending
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dutys
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duties
.
Firstly
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 , driverless cars are
posible
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possible
 but will take jobs , scare older generations and may
be not
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not be
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 as safe as we
wold
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would
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 imagine .
This
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 type of technology is very new to us . We can'
t
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 fully comprehend
is
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its
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 power to
cange
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change
 the way we drive
our self
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ourselves
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this
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these
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 days .
Neverless
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Nevertheless
we
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, we
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 are expecting it to be a normal
one
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 day
but
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, but
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 the change will
afect
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affect
 us no doubt .
For
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instance
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 there are people
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this
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these
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 days who own a Tesla
-
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,
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 a
car
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that is
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 known for driving itself .
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This
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 people
,
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apply
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have
this
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 technology now , and they still don'
t
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 trust it . They prefer to do it by
them self
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themselves
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.
A
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 image like
this
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one
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 may be in the future . Trust can'
t
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 be
instaled
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installed
 like the
techonlogy
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technology
.
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 , when I think I can just
lay
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lie
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 in a
car
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 seat and stress about traffic ,
recless
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reckless
 drivers , and other
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inconveniences
inconviniance
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inconviniance,
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 I feel like trusting a
car
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 with my life . For
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example
exemple
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exemple,
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 now I don'
t
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 drive . I
dont
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don't
 have a
drivers
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driver's
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licens
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license
 as I am
under age
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underage
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. My mother drives me to school or other places
or
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, or
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 I just take the bus . I relax and look out the window . A driverless
car
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wold
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would
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 work for me as I enjoy rides and may be too
stress
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stressed
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abut
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about
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 the driving itself. To
summarize
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summarise
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 all , I think a
car
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 that does everything itself is possible
but
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, but
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 some of us will
pe
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be
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 scared about
emracing somthing
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embracing something
 so
bog
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big
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.
I
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I'm
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 on the other
way
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hand
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, can'
t
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 wait for it .

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task response
Say your view clearly in the first paragraph and stay with it. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
task response
Give one or two clear examples to back up ideas. Simple facts or your own thoughts are enough.
coherence
Plan first: intro, 2 or 3 body parts, end. Keep ideas in a steady order.
coherence
Use linking words to show contrast and result (but, however, so, therefore) to link ideas.
language
Use short, simple sentences to avoid errors. Check spelling and word choice.
content
You show how people feel about new car tech.
structure
There is an idea at the start and a closing thought.
language
Some linking words help the flow in places.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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