You recently did a short course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter Describe what you enjoyed about the course Say how much cooking you have done since the course Suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer.
I am writing
this
to provide you with my overall
feedback on your famous cookery course " Delighted Cakes
".
I have completed a three-month crash course which is called Delighted Cakes
,and I have
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had
wonderful
experience with one of your instructors,Miss Joan , She taught me how to bake multi-layered Correct article usage
a wonderful
cakes
in an hour . Moreover
, I also
learned how to make gluten-free cakes
, which would be amazing for me and my husband because they have an allergy to gluten, thus
, i
can cook special treats for them now.
After school , I make Change the capitalization
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cakes
for my friend's birthdays as well as
for my family every two weeks. I used my school notes in order to give a flawless look to my homemade cakes
.
I am thinking of making my hobby a profession for weddings ,so i
would like to ask you about the Wedding Course .If any seats are available Change the capitalization
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this
September please inform me immediately, so i
can submit my application for enrollment.
I look forward to your reply.
Yours faithfully,
Roopkamal kaur.Change the capitalization
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task achievement
Your letter effectively addresses all parts of the task, but be sure to correct minor grammatical errors and improve sentence structures to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Although your ideas are logically structured, ensure smoother transitions between paragraphs and ideas to maintain a cohesive flow.
general
Pay attention to details like capitalization and punctuation; proper names should be capitalized, and there should be consistency with spacing and commas.
task achievement
You successfully covered all the required points, including detailing your enjoyment of the course, your current cooking activities, and a suggestion for a future course.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are well-executed and fit the formal tone of the letter.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.