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Some people think that there will be decrease in international travel in future. Do you think the less amount of international travel is a positive or a negative development?

Some
people
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a predication
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predication
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prediction
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 that in the
upcoming
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near
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 future,
people
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 will visit different countries less. I believe that
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this
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 is a positive trend because
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 it will
promotes
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promote
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organizations
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organisations
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 to grow within the Nation, and be
stress-free
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a stress-free
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 travel. The foremost reason is that
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 many small vendors will get
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to
expend
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expand
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 their business.
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 is to say that
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 most of the
travellors
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travellers
 make purchases
while
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 visiting different cities and places, if they buy it from
local
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a local
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 vendor country's GDP increases. In
constrast
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contrast
, it is observed that foreign multinational companies
shop
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source
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 products at a cheap rate from start-up firms and sell
it
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them
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 at a higher cost.
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, most of the tourist nations generate more income.
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, in
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Singapore
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Singapour
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Singapour,
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 many
newly weded
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newlywed
couple
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couples
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 go for their
honeynoon
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honeymoon
 and buy Indian items
such
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 as
traditional
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a traditional
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 wooden elephant for around 1000 INR
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if
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 they buy the same product in India, it will cost hardly 200 INR.
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, regional travel does not require more preparation
as compare
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compared
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 to
the
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apply
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global
because
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travel because
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 community
people
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 do not have to worry about submitting
application
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an application
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 to the visa officer. It is the process
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;
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 if a person wants to go abroad, he has to contact
immigration
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an immigration
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 agent and pass multiple interviews before visiting countries. Not only that, they have to go through
many
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much
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paperworks
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paperwork
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 as passport applications, medical
examination
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examinations
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, and booking air tickets.
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, a family from Ontario,
Canada
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Canada,
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 is making
plan
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plans
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 to go to
location
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the location
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 Banff does not
need
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require
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 any paperwork because there is no border
so
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, so
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 they can enjoy their journey.
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, there will be more advantages of travelling between the states, as it encourages community
people
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 to rise
and
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, and
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 with
the
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less
documentation
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documentation,
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 tourists can travel happily.

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content
Improve the task response by giving a clear, balanced view. Include both sides and then state your own min, with a clear point.
structure
Use a simple plan: intro with thesis, 2-3 body paragraphs with topic sentences, short conclusion.
grammar
Work on grammar and spellings. Shorten long sentences and fix errors.
content
Use relevant examples that fit the point. Avoid wrong facts.
strength
The writer shows a clear view that less travel can be good.
strength
Some examples are used to back ideas.
strength
There is a conclusion that restates the view.
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