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The way that people work today has changed significantly due to development of technology. Discuss the advantages and the disadvantages.

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mayority
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majority
 of the population
belive
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 that
technology
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 has been
one
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 of the biggest objects that have changed the way that people think, study, live, and work.
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the
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both sides of the
coin
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refering
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referring
 to the pros and cons of
technology
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 in the
laboural
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labour
 aspect.
In
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one
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 hand,
is
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it is
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 obvious that
technology
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 has advanced in huge steps,
nowdays
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apply
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we can do all the needed
requierments
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requirements
though
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through
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 our laptop and with an internet connection.
One
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 of the main advantages is the increase in efficacy and efficiency, completing more functions in less time. People can not deny that
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 has been beneficial.
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example
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 mothers with
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a homeoffice
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homeoffice
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home office
 can
spent
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 more time with
her
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their
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 children, raise them and be aware of the school.
In
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 the other
hand
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 I strongly
belive
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believe
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 that social interaction has decreased with the advancement of electronic devices, you can easily schedule
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one
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a
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 virtual meeting, or FaceTime your relatives
instead
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 of programming
one
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 face to face reunion. Some neuropsychological studies support that
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 type of interaction has been related
with
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to
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 a lack of social empathy, a rise in frustration and an overwhelming upward trend in
diagnosis
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the diagnosis
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 of mental health.
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also
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 could be related
with
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to
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 the idea that we are in a society that lives in a hurry, and where our friends are the AI of the cellphone or
table
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 (Like Siri or Alexa). In
conclusion
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 it is evident that
technology
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have
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has
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 some crucial aspects that could make our life much
more easy
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easier
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, but can
also
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make
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cause
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a
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apply
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detriment
in
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to
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 our mental
healt
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health
. Some
wisdom
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wise
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 people
remaks
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remark
 that life is about balance, we must apply
this
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 sentence to the relationship with
technology
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 to live a happier life.

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task
Make your idea clear in the opening line and give two clear points for both sides.
grammar
Use short, simple sentences and fix common mistakes in spelling and grammar.
structure
Have one clear idea in each paragraph and end with a short, clear close.
content
Give real and simple examples for each point to show you know the topic.
strength
The essay shows a real talk on both good and bad sides of tech.
effort
There is an attempt to give examples and to compare ideas.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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