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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the future,
people
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 will stop purchasing newspapers and
books
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, as all the information they need is already accessible for free on the
internet
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. I completely agree with that statement because technology already surpasses any kind of stats that printed papers have. Technology has grown rapidly
for
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over
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 the past century. The existence of the
internet
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 has changed the world forever, so conventional printing methods have been replaced by easier and cheaper ones which are published on the
internet
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.
Furthermore
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,
digitalizing
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digitalising
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 campaigns
also
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 happen in many countries around the world.
This
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 forces
people
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 to depend more on electronic devices than
other
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on other
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 conventional tools. Many
people
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 nowadays, especially the younger generation, prefer to seek information from the
internet
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 rather than buying
some
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apply
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books
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 or newer newspapers. Some issues are
also
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 emerging from
paper
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 being one of the causes of deforestation
since
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, since
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paper
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 is made of wood.
People
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 are protesting in front of
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paper
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the paper
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 industry to stop their actions and close the company. There were
also
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 some problems with the ink they use to make newspapers, since many traditional newspaper companies still use squid ink to write their news.
In addition
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, because of these issues,
paper
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become
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becomes
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 more expensive and it
make
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makes
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books
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book
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 prices
to
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apply
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blow uncontrollably, making
people
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 more
convince
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 to switch
into
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to
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 digital
books
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. In conclusion, I believe that
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
books
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 will be replaced by digital writing.
This
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 can be seen by the majority of the young generation
prefer
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who prefer
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 to seek information through
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internet
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the internet
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 rather than buying a book or newspaper.

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task response
Your view is clear, but the reasons could be stronger and more linked to the task. Try to add more reasons why free online info will beat printed papers and give simple, real examples.
coherence
Your essay has intro, body, and conclusion, but the flow is not smooth. Use easy linking words like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'so' to show how ideas go from one to the next.
task response
Some facts are not correct or are odd (for example, 'squid ink'). Stick to true, simple ideas and explain how tech helps people read online.
coherence
Use more clear links between sentences. Short sentences are fine, but connect ideas with simple phrases.
grammar
Check grammar and form. Use simple, correct sentence structures to avoid mistakes.
strength
Clear position and direct answer to the question.
strength
Order of intro, body, and conclusion is clear.
strength
Shows awareness of the topic with ideas about deforestation and cost.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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