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Writing Samples
Band 4

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the future,
people
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 will stop purchasing
news
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newspapers
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paper
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 and
books
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, as all the information they need
already
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will be
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 accessible for free
in
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on
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internet
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the internet
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. I completely agree with that statement because technology already
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has any
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any
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all
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 kind of stats
of
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apply
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those
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that
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 printed
paper
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 have. Technology has
grow
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grown
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 rapidly
for
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over
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 the past century. The comes of
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internet
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the internet
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 has changed the world forever. So, conventional printing methods have been replaced by easier and cheaper ones
which
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, which
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is
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involve
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 publishing their writing on
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internet
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the internet
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.
Furthermore
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,
digitalizing
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digitalising
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campaign
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campaigns
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also
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 happen in many countries around the world,
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this
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which
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 forces
people
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 to depend more on electronic devices than other conventional tools. Many
people
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 nowadays, especially the younger generation, prefer to seek information from
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internet
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the internet
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 rather than buying
some
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apply
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books
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 or
newer
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apply
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news
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paper
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newspaper
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. Some issues are
also
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 emerging from
paper
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 being one of the causes of deforestation
since
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, since
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paper
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 is made of wood.
People
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 are protesting in front of
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paper
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the paper
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 industry to stop their actions and close the company. There were
also
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 some problems with the ink they use to make newspapers, since many traditional newspaper companies still use squid ink to write their news.
In addition
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, because of these issues,
paper
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become
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becomes
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 more expensive and it
make
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makes
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books
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book
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 prices
to
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apply
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blow uncontrollably, making
people
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 more
convince
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convinced
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 to switch
into
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to
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 digital
books
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. In conclusion, I believe that
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
books
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 will be replaced by digital writing.
This
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 can be seen by the majority of the young generation prefer to seek information through
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internet
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the internet
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 rather than buying a book or newspaper.

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task response
State your view clearly in the intro and give 2–3 strong reasons with simple examples that fit the task. avoid facts that do not fit the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Make ideas flow. Use clear link words and keep one idea per paragraph. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence and finish with a short closing.
content
The writer shows a clear view on the topic.
structure
There are some good ideas and a conclusion is given.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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