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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers and books because they will be able to read everything, they want online without paying. To what extend do you agree or dis agree with this statement?

In the future, no one is going to buy hard copy
newspapers
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 and
books
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 because people can get them from
internet
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the internet
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 for free.
This
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 essay totally agrees with that statement because
this
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 will not cost anything and it is more accessible. People will read the news and
books
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 from online websites and appliances. Everything
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has become
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 expensive
and
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, and
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 most
of
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individuals have limited salaries
,
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;
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as a result
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, they are trying to decrease their expenses
by
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in
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 different ways. One of those ways is to read free soft
copy
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copies
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 of
newspapers
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 and written
books
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, which allows them to save money at
same
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the same
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 time not
stop
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stopping
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 reading.
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, many University students rely on online textbooks and
newspapers
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, because
this
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give
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gives
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 them a chance to save money
of
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on
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high
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high-priced
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price
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University
books
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. The readers are going to depend on Internet
books
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 and news because it is accessible. They found that
esay
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easy
 to reach out
our
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to our
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 digital tools and
use
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it
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them
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 for reading, because they carry them everywhere and they are connected to
Internet
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the Internet
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 regularly. Compared to hard copies, the latter are heavier and not
esay
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easy
 to
be taken
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take
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 anywhere, especially when they
use
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 public transport.
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, a survey has found
thst
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that
 most readers
use
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 their smartphones or iPads for reading more than printed copies of
books
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 and
newspapers
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 because it is very convenient and readable. In conclusion,
this
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 essay completely agrees
with
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that individuals will not buy any printed
textbook
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textbooks
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and
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or
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 news in the coming years and
use
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 online versions, because they are free and accessible.

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Task response
Your view is clear and you give some proof. Try to add more reasons and show how ideas fit together.
Language
Work on form and spelling. Use short, simple sentences. Check key spellings and prep words.
Structure
Plan your essay. Start with a short intro that states your view. Give two or three ideas with clear link words. End with a short conclusion.
Task response
Clear view from start to end.
Coherence
Uses examples such as students and phones to show a point.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital platforms
  • Global audience
  • Cost benefits
  • Environmental benefits
  • Carbon footprint
  • Tactile experience
  • Screen-free reading
  • Credibility
  • Misinformation
  • Digital divide
  • Access to digital resources
  • Lack of reliable internet
  • Enduring appeal
  • Collectability
  • Physical copies
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