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Health and leisure life has become much more stressful compared to our parent’s generation. As a result, stress related illnesses are increasing around the world. Why is stress such a problem in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress?

Many folk think that travelling and maintaining good
health
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 is becoming more and more stressful nowadays,
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crowd
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people
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 experience severe diseases
such
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 attacks. The primary reason for
this
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 issue is social news. I think blindly following
trends
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 rather than following your
heart
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 is one of the main reasons for added burden. Following social
media
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 blindly results in increased
stress
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 , as not
everyone
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 will travel in the same boat. In our
parents
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'
generation
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 , back
social
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then social
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media
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 did not have
this
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 reach, leading to
people
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 having more slower and calmer way of
life
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. In today's fast-paced world ,
everyone
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 wants to get ahead and be the best, doing which they try to show off and leave.
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,
according to
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 a leading
survey
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, following
trends
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 on Instagram has resulted in a 37% increase in
stress
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. To solve these issues, some vital steps need to be taken.
People
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 should follow their
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heart
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hearts
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instead
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 of following mindless
trends
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. In our
parents
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'
generation
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 ,
due to
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 less outreach , simplicity was the prime motive. Limiting social
media
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usage
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 will help eventually
to
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apply
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curb unnecessary trend following, leading to less expense and better finances. To provide an example,
according to
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 a recent
survey
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 ,
people
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 who have few social
media
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 engagements have 25% less
stress
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 and live a modest
life
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.
To conclude
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, agony messes up with
health
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as well as
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life
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. I think reducing anxiety by meditating and curbing social
media
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usage
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 will lead to a healthy lifestyle.Many folk think that travelling and maintaining good
health
Use synonyms
 is becoming more and more stressful nowadays,
due to
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
 , many
crowd
Check wording
people
show examples
 experience severe diseases
such
Linking Words
 as
heart
Use synonyms
 attacks. The primary reason for
this
Linking Words
 issue is social news. I think blindly following
trends
Use synonyms
 rather than following your
heart
Use synonyms
 is one of the main reasons for added burden. Following social
media
Use synonyms
 blindly results in increased
stress
Use synonyms
 , as not
everyone
Use synonyms
 will travel in the same boat. In our
parents
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'
generation
Use synonyms
 , back
social
Rephrase
then social
show examples
media
Use synonyms
 did not have
this
Linking Words
 reach, leading to
people
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 having more slower and calmer way of
life
Use synonyms
. In today's fast-paced world ,
everyone
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 wants to get ahead and be the best, doing
which
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so
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 they
try
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trying
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 to show off and leave.
For instance
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,
according to
Linking Words
 a leading
survey
Use synonyms
, following
trends
Use synonyms
 on Instagram has resulted in a 37% increase in
stress
Use synonyms
. To solve these issues, some vital steps need to be taken.
People
Use synonyms
 should follow their
Use synonyms
heart
Fix the agreement mistake
hearts
show examples
instead
Linking Words
 of following mindless
trends
Use synonyms
. In our
parents
Use synonyms
'
generation
Use synonyms
 ,
due to
Linking Words
 less outreach , simplicity was the prime motive. Limiting social
media
Use synonyms
usage
Use synonyms
 will help eventually
to
Verb problem
apply
show examples
curb unnecessary trend following, leading to less expense and better finances. To provide an example,
according to
Linking Words
 a recent
survey
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 ,
people
Use synonyms
 who have few social
media
Use synonyms
 engagements have 25% less
stress
Use synonyms
 and live a modest
life
Use synonyms
.
To conclude
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, agony messes up with
health
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as well as
Linking Words
life
Use synonyms
. I think reducing anxiety by meditating and curbing social
media
Use synonyms
usage
Use synonyms
 will lead to a healthy lifestyle.

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content
Make your view clear and keep to one main point. Do not repeat the same ideas or phrases. Give more real ideas that support your view.
structure
Plan your essay with an intro, 2 or 3 body parts, and a short end. Each part should have one main idea.
language
Use short, simple sentences and check for grammar. Try not to use long or mixed sentences.
content
Give real examples that fit the point and explain how they show your point. If you use numbers, explain them.
structure
Use linking words to make a smooth flow between ideas, like first, also, but, so, therefore.
content
The writing shows a clear view that trends can raise stress.
content
Numbers are used to back up some claims.
structure
The idea of steps to cut stress is shown.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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