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Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What does this cause? What are the effects ?

Nowadays,
citiznes
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citizens
 who are living in a big city don't know their
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neighbors
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neighbours
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, which causes them not
being
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to be
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 social and
knowing
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know
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 what lives around them.
This
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 can get affected when
people
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 are in danger, because in situations of needed help, it is easiest to get help from the
people
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 living the closest. Individuals are starting to not introduce themselves to their
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neighbors
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neighbours
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and
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, and
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 that results
into
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in
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 not knowing the
people
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 that live next to them.
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 means that they are
occupided
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occupied
 with themselves and their own life, that they don't want to be aware of the
people
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 surrounding them, which results in not being social. As an example, in an apartment in Bordeaux
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, on
average
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average,
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 a
person
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 knows one other
person
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that
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who
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 lives in the apartment building. As that shows,
that
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apply
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in a big
city
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city,
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 a
person
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 would be open to knowing on average just one more
person
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, which is an
aproximetlly
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approximately
 small number. Despite
people
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 not wanting to be social,
this
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 can lead to not having support in situations of
help
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need
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. When an individual
is needing
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needs
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 help, the closest being to them are the
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neighbors
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neighbours
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, but not knowing the ones around them can
effect
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affect
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 not
recieving
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receiving
 any help or giving it.
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, when an apartment building is on fire, the
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person
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people
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that
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who
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 can be saved
,
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apply
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 are
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neighbors
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neighbours
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, but if in
this
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 situation the
people
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 are not known,
this
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 can lead to
really
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 tragic ending. In conclusion, individuals might be getting less sociable and
are
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do
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 not
wanting
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want
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 to have contact with
its
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their
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neighbors
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neighbours
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, but
this
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 can lead to
people
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 not having support and
also
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 not being able to give it to others.

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structure
Plan a clear intro, body with 2 or 3 ideas, and a short finish.
language
Use simple sentences and fix key spelling mistakes so your meaning is easy to see.
content
Give one good example for each idea and make links crisp.
content
It answers the task and uses an example to show a point.
structure
There is a clear talk about safety as a result of not knowing neighbours.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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