In some countries, students live at home with their family while they study at university, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do the advantages of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages?

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few
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a few
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nations, pupils stay at
home
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with their parents
while
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they
educate
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are educated
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at
institution
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an institution
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,
howeever
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however
in
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, in
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other nations
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, learner
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learner
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learners
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gain knowledge from university in different cities
,
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. This
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this
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have
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has
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various benefits
,
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;
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likewise
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, it
teach
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teaches
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student
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students
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to be independent and mature personal
,
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. On
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on the other hand
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, it is costly and
have
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has
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emotional detachment . In my
opinion
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opinion,
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student
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students
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travelling
different
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to different
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cities for higher education always the advantage overweighs the
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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. To commence,
firstly
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,when a
student
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abandon
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abandons
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his
home
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town and
travel
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travels
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to
city
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a city
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, the
learner
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not only
develop
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develops
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attitude
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an attitude
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to face
challenge
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challenges
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, but
also
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learns
,
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apply
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a new exposure to the
cities
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city's
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culture, language,
life style
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lifestyle
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,
new
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and new
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commuting style.
Secondly
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,
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learners
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learner
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become independent, adapt the skill of money management and become
intellegent
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intelligent
figure
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figures
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.
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, when a
student
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move
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moves
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from village to city, his broad
sprectrem
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spectrum
of thinking, understanding and viewing the world changes drastically.
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, some
ciritics
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critics
point out, for
education
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education,
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the
student
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moves to far
away
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faraway
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place , it is costly for the family to afford it.
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, most of the rich family takes
for
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apply
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this
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decision.
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, many times the
learner
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have
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has
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to
tackel
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tackle
the emotional
barriors
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barriers
, which become quite difficult for some students.
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, when the
student
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join
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joins
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the hostel,
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home sickness
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homesickness
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and coping with the new environment become so difficult that
,
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some
student
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develops psychological setbacks. In conclusion,
although
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stay
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staying
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away from
home
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,
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apply
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develops psychological and financial problems,
nontheless
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nevertheless
, if the
learner
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decide
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decides
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to face with strong motivation, the
scilent
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silent
features are immense, like
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a
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stronger personality, gaining comprehensive life skills,
thus
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staying away from
home
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,the
advantage
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advantages
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overweighs
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outweigh
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the
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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.

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content
Your main idea is clear, but you need more strong and clear facts to back it up. Give 2 or 3 clear examples that show how living away helps study and life.
task
Be more fair to the other side. Say a real point for the bad side, then explain why the good side is bigger.
organization
Make each paragraph focus on one idea. Start with a short line that says what the paragraph is about. Then add one clear idea and a small closing line.
grammar
Use clean and short sentences. Avoid long lines. Check spelling of common words like 'student', 'independent', 'hostel', and 'home sickness'.
content
The essay shows a clear position that living away has more good points.
structure
You use 'Firstly', 'Secondly' and similar links to guide the ideas.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fosters independence
  • self-reliance
  • essential life skills
  • cultural backgrounds
  • academic performance
  • resilience
  • adaptability
  • financially burdensome
  • homesickness
  • emotional stress
  • mental health
  • familial support
  • isolation and loneliness
  • stable and supportive environment
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