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The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014.

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The given line graph illustrates the changes in the accommodation costs in three countries over a 17-year
, from
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 1997 to 2014.
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it is clear that
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the given countries adhered to rising trends.
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Country
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 A generally had higher housing costs, followed by
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B
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,
Country
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C
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 remained at the bottom, despite a gradual increase.
Country
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 A and
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B
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 shared similar standings in the initial year, displaying nearly 200,000$, whilst
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C
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 represented 150,000$. In 2000,
Country
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 A remained unchanged, whilst
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B
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 and
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C
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 highlighted 250,000$ and 200,000$ after four years, **
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 A experienced a dramatic rise**, climbing from around 200,000
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 to approximately **550,000
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 in 2004**, making it the most expensive among the three throughout the period.
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B
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 increased, reaching **nearly 350,000
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**, but its growth was less steep. Meanwhile, **
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C
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 saw only a modest rise**, moving to just above **200,000
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** in the same year. Between 2004 and 2008, **house prices in
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 A fluctuated slightly**, staying within the 500,000–550,000-dollar range, before climbing steadily to **around 750,000
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 by 2011**, where they remained relatively stable until 2014.
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B
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,
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, experienced **a brief decline after 2004**, dropping to about **250,000
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 in 2008**, but
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 sharply increased to **roughly 500,000
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 by 2009**, followed by minor fluctuations until 2014. In comparison, **
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C
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 continued its gradual upward trend**, rising steadily and peaking at **around 300,000
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 in 2013**, before slightly decreasing
at the end
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 of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, b, c, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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