IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014.

The given line graph illustrates the changes in the accommodation costs in three countries over a 17-year
, from
Check wording
period, from
show examples
 1997 to 2014.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the given countries adhered to rising trends.
While
Linking Words
Country
Use synonyms
 A generally had higher housing costs, followed by
Country
Use synonyms
B
Use synonyms
,
Country
Use synonyms
C
Use synonyms
 remained at the bottom, despite a gradual increase.
Country
Use synonyms
 A and
Country
Use synonyms
B
Use synonyms
 shared similar standings in the initial year, displaying nearly 200,000$, whilst
Country
Use synonyms
C
Use synonyms
 represented 150,000$. In 2000,
Country
Use synonyms
 A remained unchanged, whilst
Country
Use synonyms
B
Use synonyms
 and
Country
Use synonyms
C
Use synonyms
 highlighted 250,000$ and 200,000$ after four years, **
Country
Use synonyms
 A experienced a dramatic rise**, climbing from around 200,000
dollars
Use synonyms
 to approximately **550,000
dollars
Use synonyms
 in 2004**, making it the most expensive among the three throughout the period.
Country
Use synonyms
B
Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
 increased, reaching **nearly 350,000
dollars
Use synonyms
**, but its growth was less steep. Meanwhile, **
Country
Use synonyms
C
Use synonyms
 saw only a modest rise**, moving to just above **200,000
dollars
Use synonyms
** in the same year. Between 2004 and 2008, **house prices in
Country
Use synonyms
 A fluctuated slightly**, staying within the 500,000–550,000-dollar range, before climbing steadily to **around 750,000
dollars
Use synonyms
 by 2011**, where they remained relatively stable until 2014.
Country
Use synonyms
B
Use synonyms
,
on the other hand
Linking Words
, experienced **a brief decline after 2004**, dropping to about **250,000
dollars
Use synonyms
 in 2008**, but
then
Linking Words
 sharply increased to **roughly 500,000
dollars
Use synonyms
 by 2009**, followed by minor fluctuations until 2014. In comparison, **
Country
Use synonyms
C
Use synonyms
 continued its gradual upward trend**, rising steadily and peaking at **around 300,000
dollars
Use synonyms
 in 2013**, before slightly decreasing
at the end
Linking Words
 of the period.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words country, b, c, dollars with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: