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The table below describe percentage of homeschooled students in some country in 1999 to 2004

The bar chart provides key information about homeschooling learners in some countries between 1999 and 2004. The units are measured in percentage.
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, it is clear from the graph that kindergarten
students
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 had the highest proportion of home-schooled
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 the decades. In
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, the percentage in
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 7-8 remained stable in the three periods given,
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 home-schooled
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 in
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 5-6 saw a significant increase in the
last
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 year.
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 what is shown,
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 with, kindergarten learners started at just 2.4% in 1999, and rose considerably over the period, increasing to 2.9% by 2004. The number of homeschooling
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 in
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 1-2 experienced fluctuation, beginning at 1.5%, and ending with 2.1% during 2004.
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, the number of
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 3-4 grew slightly, reaching 2.2% of learners. In terms of
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 5-6, there was a growth throughout 2004, at 2.6% of homeschooling
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, The ratio of
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 7-8 remained consistent at 1.6% during the period
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afterwards
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 the number of
students
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 jumped, increasing to 2.5 by 2004.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, grades with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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