The pie charts below show the results of a surveys into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995

The pie charts provided key information about a variety of leisure

activities

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in Europe from 1985 to 1995. The units are measured in percentage.

Overall

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, it is clear from the graph that watching TV had the highest portion compared to other

activities

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during the period.

In addition

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, the proportion of talking with family and eating out was almost similar,

whereas

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the number of talking with friends increased in the next period given.

According to

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what is shown,

to begin

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with, watching TV had the highest fraction of

activity

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spending by adults, reaching more than a third in 1985, and eating out had the second

most

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highest

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spending

leisure

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on leisure

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, at 23%.

Moreover

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, other

activity

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was the smallest portion, with 6% by 1985. In terms of 1995, watching TV

also

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represent

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represented

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a significant

activity

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for the majority of people, with just less than half of total

activity

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In contrast

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, the percentage of eating out experienced a considerable decrease, dropping to 8%.

Furthermore

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, talking with friends and playing computer games were the second leisure

activities

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for adults, at just more than a quarter of total

activities

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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, activity with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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183 words

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