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The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given table illustrates the total citizens of New
York
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 and the five cities of New
York
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 for three different time periods: 1800, 1900 and 2000. It is manifest from the table that, population of New
York
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 increased significantly over the period of 2 centuries. In 1800, the total
citizens
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population
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 was close to 80,000 in New
York
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, and the majority of the
people
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 lived in
Manhattan
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 (76% of the total residents), which accounts for over 60 thousand.
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 merely 24%
people
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 lived in
other
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the other
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four
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 towns, which was in total over 18,000. Between 1800 and 1900,
people
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 started living more in Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens and Staten Island, where approximately half of the New
York
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 inhabitants lived in
Manhattan
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 and the other half in
four
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 towns. But, for the
last
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 century, there has been a significant migration
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from
Manhattan
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 to
other
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the other
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four
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 towns. The population of New
York
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 more than doubled within a century, from over 3 million to over 8 million, but
minimal
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a minimal
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 percentage of
people
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was
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lived in
Manhattan
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 (19%), and almost
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apply
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four
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-fifths citizens
were
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lived in the
four
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 cities, namely, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens and Staten Island.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words york, people, manhattan, four with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • people
  • city
  • five
  • district
  • grow
  • growth
  • rise
  • increase
  • increase
  • rise
  • fall
  • decline
  • high
  • low
  • big
  • large
  • small
  • more
  • less
  • over time
  • by year
  • in total
  • compare
  • compared with
  • whereas
  • trend
  • pattern
  • overall
  • feature
  • note
  • point
  • difference
  • lead
  • catch up
  • late
  • early
  • century
  • decade
  • period
  • 2000
  • 1800
  • 1900
  • continuous
  • steady
  • rapid
  • fast
  • slow
  • periods
  • numbers
  • data
  • report
  • describe
  • summarise
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