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Newspapers have an enormous influence on people's opinions and ideas.What are the reasons for this?Is this positive or negative development?

In recent years,because of the
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proliferation
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 individuals have started to devour them more than before,impacting
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the way they perceive the world.There are several factors which lead to
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, and I consider that it is a detrimental change. One reason why people are accustomed to prioritize ideas that are given in newspapers is that they do not have adequate knowledge
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 a particular field.It is undeniable that individuals who are not well-versed are inclined to alter their thoughts considering others,as they are not aware of essential,reliable data.Another factor that triggers to shift
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 perspective is celebrity endorsement.Once humans read that an eminent
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 broadcasts
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news,they believe
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them
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 without checking if it is trustworthy.A number of surveys have been conducted on
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and
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 it has been
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 that if
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they reads
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reads
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read
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 or
watches
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watch
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 newsflash which was broadcast by their idol or
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person
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,they trust
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them more than when they get information from strangers.
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,
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 condition is disadvantageous for the citizens and society.A primary ramification is that
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 contributes to misunderstanding,since not all newspapers publish scientifically proven materials.
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 kind of information can lead to health issues.To elaborate,if a
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 reads a recommendation that was about losing weight,there is a possibility of having health-related problems.Because every
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 has various
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 and not everything could be suitable for them.Another repercussion is being dependent on others.Constant exposure
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news
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 and accounting for
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others'
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 opinions will affect the way people think.They become reluctant to search for approaches themselves when they have challenging situations,influencing their critical thinking.
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,being ignorant on a specific sphere and overestimating popularity are the core incentives which drive
indivuduals
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individuals
 to consider news seriously.Yet
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 health issues and deteriorates people's problem-solving skills.

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structure
Make a clear plan for your essay. In the first paragraph say your view. Use the next paragraphs to add a reason and an example, then a short finish.
language
Use short, clean sentences. Do not join many ideas in one sentence.
content
Give one clear reason for how newspapers change thought and add a short example. Then explain how it shows the idea.
language
Check your spelling and word choice. Fix errors like 'prolifiration', 'indivuduals', and 'repercussion'.
cohesion
Try to connect ideas with simple links, such as 'also', 'but', 'however', and 'for example'.
idea
You give a clear view that the topic can be bad.
example
You use an example about weight loss to back a point.
structure
The essay has an introduction that states your view and a conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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