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Your friend is celebrating her Birthday soon and has invited you to a party. But you are unable to come because you are going to attend an important meeting that day. Write a letter to your friend and thank her for the invitation; explain why you cannot come; propose to meet on other day;

Dear Claire, Thank you very much for giving me
invitation
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an invitation
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on
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to
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 your birthday celebration, which is coming next week. I
'
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apply
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am
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'm
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 afraid to let you know that I'm unable to attend
due to
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 a specific reason. I was so excited to come to your special moments, because I know you always feel special and have lots of fun with your friends and family. Every year, you wait for
this
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day
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 so you can enjoy and spend family time with your loved ones and create important memories. Thanks again for
invitation
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the invitation
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.
However
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, I can't reach
to
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you because my manager has held a compulsory annual meeting that
day
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 regarding some policy changes.
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, participation of all team members is mandatory
and
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, and
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 everyone has to present their viewpoints, so
some
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that some
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 changes can be made in our company. I'd definitely like to meet you on the weekend if you don't mind and understand my problem. Please let me
if
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know if
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 you want me to come on
thementioned
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the mentioned
day
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 or any other
day
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 that
suit
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 you. Meet you soon, Best regards, Ann

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grammar
Fix small grammar errors. Use 'inviting me to your birthday party' instead of 'giving me invitation'. 'I'm afraid I can't come' instead of 'I' am afraid'. 'I can't reach to you' should be 'I can't come' or 'I can't be there'.
clarity
Make the reason clear and short. Say 'My manager has a meeting that day' and keep it simple.
structure
Break long ideas into separate paragraphs. Each paragraph should hold one main idea.
content
End with a kind offer to meet on another day and ask for a time that works.
tone
The letter shows a warm thank you to your friend.
content
The plan to meet on another day is clear.
structure
The closing is polite.
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