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Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many argue that a
child
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 learns what is acceptable for society at home,
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 some believe that school is a better place where these values are taught.
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 teachers can certainly change
children
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’s
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 it will not account for the influence other
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 have, and
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 why I think that they should be raised
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parents
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parents,
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 as they know what the specific needs of their sons and daughters are. On one hand, teachers do show their
students
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 what is right and wrong.
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not only teach their specific subject, but they
also
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 keep discipline in the classroom. If they do not do the latter, they will fail to create a good learning environment because
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 will just disrespect the tutor and stop following the norms. A good example of
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 is how the youth
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 taught to behave properly during a class in Japan, where they would stop any bad behaviour as they already know what is acceptable and what is not.
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, the negative influence that some
students
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 have over the rest is not taken into consideration, just
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 it happens in the United States with
children
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 who sell drugs at school and make others depend on illegal substances.
On the other hand
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,
parents
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 can tailor their parenting to match their
children
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’s particular needs. Not all the girls and boys have the same personality traits, so a
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 teaching experience will not have the same outcome for all the
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. A father or a mother could take all the background information surrounding a
child
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 and use it to act on what is specifically necessary to teach them how to discern bad and good behaviour.
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, there are some
children
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 with ADHD or anger issues, problems that most teachers are not aware of, but that
parents
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 know and can tackle in a proper way to teach valuable lessons.
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 is for me, a better approach to show a
child
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 the correct path and will ensure they are really understanding what is right and wrong. In conclusion, even when school teachings have a real impact on their
students
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’ discipline, it does not consider the impact of
children
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 who lead others into wrongdoing, and
that is
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 why it is better to teach them proper manners back at
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home,
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 because
parents
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 can adapt to the particular circumstances a
child
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 is facing.

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task response
Be very clear on your view. Start with a short line that states your own choice, then use body paragraphs to explain both sides and end with a short restatement.
coherence
Make each paragraph start with a clear topic sentence. Keep one idea per paragraph and add a few linking words to connect ideas (for example: also, but, so, however).
strength
The essay shows a clear view and covers both sides.
strength
The sentences are mostly simple and easy to read.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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