Individuals have nothing to do to improve the environment.Governments and large companies can do to improve the environment. Do you agree or disagree?

In the contemporary era , environmental
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is increasingly
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and has triggered a heated debate. Some people argue that
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cannot contribute to environmental
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,
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governments
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and large companies are capable of doing so.
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,
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I agree that
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and large companies do play a big role in improving the environment,I
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believe that
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are crucial as well. Clearly,
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and large corporations serve as the most direct participants and coordinators in advancing environmental
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.
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, a large proportion of the world’s total pollution and carbon emissions generally come from a surprisingly small number of major companies, and
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can be reduced significantly by strict regulations.
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, major environmental problem-solving strategies almost always come from government discussions, which directly result in environmental
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.
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,I assert that
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can contribute to environmental
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by driving social change and sharing responsibilities.
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grassroots campaigns started by environmental-protecting
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have proven to be very effective at raising public awareness about serious environmental threats and promoting the issuance of new policies.
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,since global environmental damage is the result of
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daily actions of billions of people,a successful solution to
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problem must be the simple act of taking personal responsibility for the environment,which helps to create the necessary support for significant government-led environmental policies.
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,environmental
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needs the deeply interconnecting efforts from the
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,
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and corporations.Only through
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arrangement
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would
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the Earth
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be made more beautiful.

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task response
The idea is clear: both people and big group act. The writing shows this in most part. Make your view clear in the first line and keep it in the rest of the essay.
coherence
Make the way ideas are put in a small map. Use clear order: intro, body, then end. Use one idea per paragraph with a simple link to the next.
coherence
Add more proof from life or facts in simple form to back up a point.
grammar
Fix small spell and mark goes. Put space after comma and dot.
content
The essay has a clear aim and says both sides are needed.
structure
It has an intro, body, and a short end.
coherence
It uses linking words like 'Firstly', 'Secondly' to show order.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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