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Band 4.5

Individuals have nothing to do to improve the environment.Governments and large companies can do to improve the environment. Do you agree or disagree?

owadays
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Nowadays
, as pollution has
became
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 an increasingly terrible problem for
human
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humans
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 to face. Some experts consider that only big companies and
government
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the government
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 can do something
the
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help to
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to help
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 convert the
situtation
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situation
,
while
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 individuals can do nothing. In my opinion,
although
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 the big companies and governments are playing an important role in protecting the
environment
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,
normal
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 citizens can help. Well,
We
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we
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 have to admit that big social
organizations
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organisations
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 are important in improving the
environment
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. Those
organization
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organisations
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 can provide a huge impact
to
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on
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the
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apply
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society with only a single policy
is
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published. In that case, if that policy is about reducing pollution, the
environment
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 can be highly improved.
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, our country's government is adding more
tax
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taxes
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 on fuels. Which
encourage
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the
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bike riding and public transport.
That is
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 because the price of fuel may be too high for some consumers. Making them have a lower demand
in
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for
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 driving cars. Less carbon dioxide
released
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is released
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 by cars. Leading to the
improvment
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improvement
to
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of
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 the
environment
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.
However
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, the effort that normal people can
is
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also
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 essential to the Earth.
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 a single person’s action may seem small, the combined power of millions of individuals can create a remarkable influence.
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, if every household
close
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closes
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their light
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its lights
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 for an hour, millions
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of tones
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tones
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tons
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 of carbon
dioxides
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dioxide
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 may not
been
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be
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 released.These
behaviors
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behaviours
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 do not require large investments, but they show a strong sense of responsibility toward the planet. All in all, the big
organizations
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organisations
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 which have large social
resource
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resources
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 may have a bigger impact on planet protection, but with a small change in each individual's daily
routine
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routine,
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 a big difference would be
mad
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made
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task
State your clear view in the first line: do you agree or disagree? Then give 2–3 main ideas and end with a clear conclusion.
coherence
Make each paragraph focus on one main idea. Use simple linking words (and, but, also, then) to connect ideas and check grammar.
strength
Your view that both big groups and people can help is clear.
strength
You give a real example about taxing fuel to cut pollution.
strength
You try to link ideas with words like However and Although.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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