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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is no denying the fact that our
lives
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 are very precious.
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, we should spend them meaningfully.
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While it
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 is a commonly held belief that staying in modern regions can bring much success to the population. There is
also
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 an argument that remote area plays a vital role in enhancing our moods.
This
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 essay will discuss
this
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 topic from both points of view, followed by my opinion. On one hand, some
people
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 sparked a debate over the benefits of
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lives
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 in vibrant areas.
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, they believe that
life
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 in them has many pros for the population.
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 a high quality of
life
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 in various fields, like education, health, transportation and security.
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, the economic system of the public who
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lives
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 there is better than those who
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 the suburbs. What is more, the public can achieve considerable opportunities
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 the revaluation of the industrial sector and international commerce.
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, the capital cities provide the citizens with a decent
life
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 and well-being.
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, some
people
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 consider that
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lives
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life
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 in the countryside is quieter and healthier, and they hold many advantages for the inhabitants, like avoiding noise, congested and crowded roads.
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, increasing the social bonds and integration of the community.
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, it plays a crucial role in improving
people
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's authenticity.
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, some statistics reveal that the vast majority of rural
people
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 spend their
life
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 conveniently without any mental or body disorders
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 they are heavily dependent on
their
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apply
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agriculture, which generates fresh
aliments
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food
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. In conclusion, I strongly agree with
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spending
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 my time in a large city rather than a small village
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outstanding
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 options there.

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task response
Make your view clear at the end. Start with a plan in the intro and end with the view you have.
task response
Talk about both sides with enough detail. Do not add new ideas at the end.
coherence cohesion
Use simple links to join ideas: first, next, also, but, however.
grammar vocabulary
Keep to short, easy sentences. Check grammar: use cities and countryside correctly.
content
Give real examples and numbers if you can.
structure
The intro shows a plan.
content
The essay asks about both sides.
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There is a conclusion that states an opinion.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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