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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly spending in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly spending in 1968 and in 2018.
The graph presents the information about families' average weekly expenses in the period 1968-2018.
Overall
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, it can be seen that people spent most of their money on food and
least
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the least
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 on fuel and power. In
1968
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1968,
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 the
spendings
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spending
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 on food was a lot higher, about 35%,
while
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 in 2018 it was approximately 17%. It decreased by 18% over
this
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 period. Transport, personal
goods
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 and household
goods
Use synonyms
 required the same amount of weekly income in 1968, which is roughly about 8%.
Although
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 in 2018 it can be observed that transport and personal
goods
Use synonyms
 had a difference of 10% of
expenditure
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expenditure,
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whereas
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 household
goods
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 maintained stability. The least share of household expenses was on fuel and power. In
1968
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1968,
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 it was around 6% and it slightly decreased in 2018
reaching
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, reaching
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 4%. The huge difference could be seen in leisure over the period of 50 years. In
2018
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2018,
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 it dramatically increased by 14% compared to
1968
Punctuation problem
1968,
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where
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when
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 it was at only 8%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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