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The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.

The table gives the amount of international
population
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 living
amoungst
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amongst
 five European countries in 2011.
Overall
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, it
is
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was recorded
,
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apply
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 that the most people migrating to their
neighboring
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neighbouring
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country
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 were Polish,
while
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 the least of the
mirgating
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migrating
population
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 came from Spain.
Whereas
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, Germany had
most
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internation
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international
 individuals in comparison to
Polland
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Poland
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, having the least. A major
population
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 of about 1198.000 was recorded to have settled in Germany, followed by Britain, of around 1,037.000, being the second most
mirated
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populated
country
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 in the chart.
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,
Polland
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 had only about 6.000, which stood to be
least
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 migrated
country
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. Most of the people migrating to their neighbouring European
country
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 were
Pollish
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Polish
 in
ethinicity
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ethnicity
,
acounting
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accounting
to
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for
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 1,168.00 in total, closely followed by Italians at around 683.670,
migrated
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who migrated
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 in one year. Spain had the lowest
population
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migrated
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migrating
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 to other countries
of
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in
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 Europe,
amount
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amounting
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 to only 202.170. British nationals had the second
most
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largest
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amount
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number
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 of people migrated,
reachiung
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reaching
upto
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up to
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 524.760
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while
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, while
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 Germany had almost the same
population
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 of 539.000 migrated over the
year2011
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year 2011
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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