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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Many people these days have computer, laptops, telephones at their home for work. Do you think, working from home has more advantages or disadvantages? Give reasons.

Computers,Laptops and telephones
has
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 made everything
accesible
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accessible
 around us.After
covid-19
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,
people
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 started working from
home
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.I think working from
has
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home has
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 both advantages and disadvantages.
Lets
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 put light on the pros and cons of working from
home
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. Working from
home
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 means having access to your office right away from your phone,Laptops and computers.Due
the
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 highly
transmissable
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transmissible
 nature of
covid
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COVID-19
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varients
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variants
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 in
2019
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2019,
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people
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 became
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home bound
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,
the
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 concept of online office and classes was
introducted
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introduced
 around the globe.
People
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 who
work
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 from
home
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 can easily spend more time with their family.You
dont
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don't
 have to worry about early morning traffic.When you
work
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 from
home
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,you are more relaxed.You can have meals whenever you want.
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pros
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pros,
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 there are several disadvantages of laptops and computers
,
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;
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the quality of
work
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 can be compromised by working from
home
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.
People
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 have become lazy
and
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, and
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 their
life
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lives
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has
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have
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 become
monotnous
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monotonous
due to
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work
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working
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 from
home
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.
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example
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 we can see videos of pets coming and
intrupting
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interrupting
 the online meetings.So you
cant
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can't
 really have a proper professional environment at
home
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.Going to
office
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the office
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,getting dressed up makes you active and helps you to groom yourself. In the
end
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 I would like
to conclude
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 the
discussio
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discussion
 with the idea that there are
pro
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pros
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 and cons of
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work
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working
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 from
home
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but
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, but
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 making a choice can be based on several
deterimants
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determinants
.

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planning
Plan your essay with a small plan before you write. Start with a short intro that says what you think. Then write one body para for good points and one for bad points. End with a short conclusion.
language
Keep to simple and short sentences. Check words like 'accesible', 'monotonous', 'varients' and fix spell and form. Use apostrophes correctly.
coherence
Make each paragraph have one clear idea. Use linking words like also, but, however, so to tie ideas.
content
Intro states the topic and goal to discuss pros and cons.
structure
The essay gives both sides of the topic.
structure
There is a conclusion that restates idea.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advantages
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • drawbacks
  • flexibility
  • work schedule
  • elimination
  • commute
  • increased productivity
  • improved
  • work-life balance
  • cost savings
  • potential
  • distractions
  • social isolation
  • separating
  • supervision
  • limited
  • opportunities
  • career growth
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